Wednesday, September 5, 2007

Elfen Lied First Draft

Act 1

Her name is Lucy, unlike the rest of us, she was created in lab, designed to be the ultimate biological weapon. Her psychic powers allow her to move objects with her mind. She knows very little, like a child, she doesn’t have her own free will because of the helmet on her head. This helmet is installed with an artificial intelligence that commands her every move. She is just a weapon of war.

She is growing, the personality inside her is trapped by the helmet, she wants to be free, eventually her desire to be her own master became strong enough to free her mind of the shackles of the artificial intelligence. For the first time, she moves on her own free will. The guards are surprised, but before they could react, Lucy instantly rips their limbs off without even moving a muscle. The entire research facility is shut down and guards rush to stop her. Armed with machine guns, a dozen guards unload their rounds on this girl, none of them hits her. Instead, she effortlessly returns the bullets in the direction they came. The guards were all instantly killed. Filled with joy, she begins to run away from the facility, her creator Kurama fires a sniper rifle aimed at the back of her head. Having let her guard down, the bullet pierces through the helmet and wounds her head. She falls into the ocean unconscious.

Yuka wait her childhood friend Kouta at Gokurakuji station. Yuka spots Kouta in the distance making his way to the ocean and the two head down to the beach to reminisce, the last time they were here. Yuka interrupt his thought and point out the ocean waves carried a girl’s body to the beach. It’s Lucy. Lucy does not seem as menacing as she escaped from the facility. However, Kouta and Yuka are trying to approach her, but she quickly darts in the opposite direction and start crying. Lucy losses her memories, She becomes a childlike girl who can not say any other word, except for “Nyu”. Therefore, Kouta and Yuka decided to call her ‘Nyuu” because that is all she says.

Meanwhile, the facility and the government, everyone is trying to figure out how they could let a vicious, dangerous weapon escape. The chief Kurama organize a special team to catch Lucy. Kurama also sent her daughter “Nana” out to hunt Lucy. “Nana” is an ultimate weapon as well; she also got the same ability as Lucy and even stronger then Lucy. The team have arrived Gokurakuji and start to find her and catch her.

To be continued

Please feel free to comment
This is my first time writing a short story hehe~~

Victor Chen

3 comments:

Pear Jin said...

hehe, this story kinda reminds me of terminator.

Birdie said...
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Birdie said...

As Vogler said that more popular in Asia is the open-ended approach in which there is a sense of unanswered question, which leave the audience a space to thinking or predicting.

It seems that most of our group member’s fan fiction writings were benefited by this open-ended space. I remembered that you’ve been mentioned that writing will involve the supernatural, mental disorders, sex and controversial science. I just wondering can you please make the sex scenes romantic and beautiful, but not so direct like kind of the guy style such like the Angelus in the Buffy.

By the way, it is very clear your writing is a SF genre, will you involve some Cyberpunk features or not, cause currently I did not see any from the reading.