Wednesday, September 5, 2007

Gantz by Yi-An for Week 8

Act 1 The Beginning

Korono Kei who is a high school freshman, as same as other school boys and thought only about girls. Furthermore, Kei always gets some things in his mind, but he does not like to express his own thought to other. However, he is a traditional Japanese male. One day, on his way home, the sky was dark. A vagrant beggar accidentally fell from the train platform. He did not care about other people, and at first he even enjoyed to watch how this man was going to die. However, Kato, who was the childhood friend of Kei, immediately jumps into the train to help the man. Kei truly wanted to reject him, but he did not. When they put the man on the platform, the train was coming. At the moment, there were such a blank in their brains, what both Kei and Kato could do is dash, as fast as possible. They were hoping the train could be break off, whatever, it is too late.

“Where is this place? Somewhere in Japan?” said Kei and Kato. They were so amazed that they were still alive. “Look at that ball. What is that? Are we saved by someone? Hey, we even did not have any injury.” said Kei. And then soon Kei also noticed that there were some other guys there, two people squatted at the corner and there was a person who stood behind the black ball looked at them quite depressed. However, their eyes went around again this place and tried to move around their legs and touched their own bodies. This was a room, and there was a big black ball such like a 32inch Television at the center of the room and there was a large window on the left side of wall. They even saw the Tokyo Tower just not far away from here. When Kei walked close to the window, he felt an invisible wall between his hand and the window. “Oh…What’s happened? Can anyone tell me?” said Kei. On the other hand, Kato seemed much more imperturbable than Kei, and he held his breath to what would be happen next.

Three minutes past, there was a comatose young woman who was formed by molecules appeared in front of Kai on the ground. The woman slowly opened the eyes and crawled to Kai. “Is here heaven?” said the woman. After they had a small conversation, Kai knew that the woman named Fomiko who was killed herself by the gas. Therefore, Kato indicated that they were killed by the train, but they were transferred into here at that time. After a while, some people continually were appeared in this room. Each person seemed to have been dead, and suddenly found them in the room. Since the increasable numbers of people entered in this room, they discussed, they yelled for help. They were so worried about what’s happened to them. “What a mystery!” said a guy.
Act 2 Mission Starting

1. The black ball gave the weapons and special suits. It also indicated the target who has to be killed was an alien.
2. People had been sent to the war area. And start hunting the target.
3. The reaction of people has changed because of the alien.
4. Teammates was killed be aliens.
5. Aliens were killed.
6. Returning base.

Act 3 Losing

1. Back to the Human world………
To be continued...
Please feel free to comment. Thank you...^^

4 comments:

Pear Jin said...

I believed I commented on your proposal that this storyline reminds me of Battle Royale except that the people in Gantz are all dead and they have to kill aliens to go back to the real world again.

oh, you were going to write about the mystery of the black ball, aye?
^^ Looking forward to read about that.

Pear Jin said...

I just reread my comment and I thought that is not much of a constructive feedback, however, I thought that maybe you can do with some grammar corrections and vocab revision?

Well, I am not anyone to say anything, but that's just my opinion.

xoxo

Birdie said...
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Birdie said...

I think the Act one will be the shining part of your writing instead the major crisis in the Act two or three, because the imagination is very special and magnificent.

Compare to the Act one, the rest parts will be the traditional and common, similar to the other allies war stories. However, remember I mentioned before?

If you, Yi-an wrote a fan fiction is bloody dark and violent, make me sick, that means you are absolutely successful.